Kiel95

for practice, i suggeset writing different fanfics at the same time. it helps improve your own writing style... you don't always have to publish them, as some will not come out correctly, but as time goes on, those mistakes will help you improve and become a much better writer ^^ good luck! can't wait to read more

well.. its has a few grammatical errors which make it slightly confusing... and i guess the wording doesn't necessarily fit the characters... and youre missing a bit in the beginning... but other than that i think it'll be a pretty good story and i can't wait to read more ^^

XD thanks for the compliments.... an you're probably right... that poor dog WOULD die of food poisoning XD

i was thinking about the personalities when i wrote this, and i knew itd be a bit off... but then again, how would we know what their relationship will be like if they both change back??? i mean, right now we know their personalities, but since we can only guess what it'll be later, i just made up one to fit what i want it to fit... and sides, at the end, don't forget that most ppl have already left the theatre... shiho was waiting for him at the exit, and i guess that had been secretly dating or something... i didn't feel like writing too much of a background for the story, but i thought that this would be nice to have a shinran and a shinshi ending... and it woulda been hard to do that if it was before he shrunk, or while he was a kid... and they cant change back without worrying bout the BO... anyways, glad you likd it ^^ and i think that the reason that most guys would take all the chocolate is because they may not be necessarily popular with the girls, or they just haven't found the one they truly like ^^ ah, and yjack,thnx ^^ i try my best ^^

The first section is a Shinran love story for valentines day, and in the spoiler section is a sort of continuation that turns it into a shinshi story ^^ so read the first part if you're a shinran, and read the first and second if you're a shinshi ^^ Shinichi burst out the door with his bag and jacket in his arms and a piece of buttered toast in his mouth. as he ran down the street he pulled his jacket on and nibbled on his bread. he whipped around the corner and crashed straight into his childhood friend Ran. They fell to the ground and Shinichi stammered, "Ah, S-sorry Ran." Standing up, he helped pull her to her feet with a sheepish smile. The two walked in silence to school. As soon as they entered the classroom, everyone shouted, "Woo! Lookie here, husband and wife are together yet again!" A few girls nudged Ran and said, "Go on, give it to your husband." Ran blushed furiously. ~Tacticalwolf The rest of the school day flew by the same, girls gave chocolate to the guys they liked. Shinichi refused quite a few times, each time telling them that he couldn't accept it. After school, Shinichi and Ran were leaving together, and he had a somewhat depressed aura around him. Ran hesitantly pulled out a chocolate and said, "H-here you go, Shinichi!" she blushed brightly. Light pink colored his cheeks as he accepted them happily and smiled. "Want to go to Karaoke?" he asked. "Sure," she smiled in reply. They walked to the karaoke place and grabbed a booth. She smiled and laughed as he lip-synced, since he was completely and utterly tone-deaf. Also, since he didn't have to pay much attention to the words, he danced and made funny facial expressions the whole time. About halfway through the first our, Ran left the room to use the restroom. Shinichi pulled out the chocolate while blushing. As he was taking a bite, he noticed how dry his throat was. He clenched the chocolate between his teeth and dug through his jacket looking for his wallet. Finally, once his wallet was located, he pulled out some cash and opened the door to get to the vending machine out in the hallway. When he pulled the door open, Ran, who was on the other side, about to turn the doorknob, was pulled into the room and against Shinichi. They both crashed to the floor, Ran on top of Shinichi. The chocolate held in Shinichi's mouth, was now also being bitten by Ran. They swallowed the chocolate with a loud gulp. While blushing the two broke out laughing. As they calmed down he slid his fingers through her hair and whispered, "I really love you." Ran blushed furiously and replied, "I... love you too." They smiled and hugged, still sprawled out on the floor. "Happy Valentines Day," he whispered. He leaned in towards her, bringing his lips dangerously close to hers. ~Kiel

well, i guess it's fine, but i feel that it was a bit rushed, and that the back and forth went by too quickly, i understand if they're short responses, but when it's a sentence, you need to break it up a bit... usually there's always something that can break up a convos neatly... well anyways... i just... don't think the personalities matched too well, and teh descriptions were a bit bland... otherwise, i did like it ^^