hopes 237 Report post Posted February 11, 2011 Hey guys! here's chapter 7! Enjoy~ I yawned. It was a Tuesday morning. I HATE Tuesday mornings. It’s so boring and tiring. Everything’s dreary. Still in the beginning of a new school week. Get up early, blah, blah, blah. “Miyuki-chan!” I grumbled. Did I mention I HATE Tuesdays? “Coming, Ran!” I called. That’s right. Yesterday I was transported to this world somehow. I’m staying with the Mouris. I’m posing as Edogawa Conan’s sister Miyuki. Then I remembered Gin and Vodka. My blood chilled. Hm, I thought. I hope Conan will be okay… I rolled out of the futon and dragged myself towards my suitcase. I chose my usual outfit: Jeans and a striped t-shirt with a light jacket. I walked out of the room towards the kitchen. “Good morning.” “Good morning!” Ran and Conan answered. I looked around. “Where’s Ojiisan?” “Still sleeping.” I sat down next to Conan and started to slowly wake up. I yawned. “Oh, Miyuki-chan.” Ran said. “I signed you up for Teitan Middle School.” Now, that woke me up. “Oh, um, thanks Ran.” I stuttered. Then I remember something about Japanese culture. It’s rude if you’re younger to address someone older than you by his or her first name. “Um, Ran?” She looked at me. “Yes, Miyuki-chan?” “Uh, do you want me to call you Ran-neechan? You are older than me, and you can keep calling me Miyuki-chan. Is that okay?” Ran smiled. “Of course it is, Miyuki-chan.” We ate breakfast chatting a bit. In the middle, Kogoro stumbled into the room and started stuffing his face. Ran started to scold him and Conan and I snickered. Ah, it was nice to be in this world. Well, except for the Black Organization that is. Soon, it was time for the three of us to go to school. We started walking together. First, we dropped the faux child off at Teitan Elementary School. I waved goodbye and said “I love you, Conan-kun~” If looks could kill, I’d be dead about 100 times. Then, Ran walked me to Teitan Middle School. It was a few blocks from Conan’s school and Ran’s was a few blocks away as well. She dropped me off there. We waved good-bye to each other. I sighed. And I headed through the schoolyard. I felt people staring at me. I ignored them and walked to the principal’s office. I knocked. “Come in.” I opened the door and walked in. “Good morning.” A man sitting in a chair greeted. “Good morning.” I replied. “My name is Edogawa Miyuki. I’m from the United States of America. I’m a new student here.” “Ah, hold on a second.” The man looked at a clipboard. “Yes, you were signed up yesterday. By the way, my name is Tanaka Masanori. I’m the principal here.” I nodded. “Ok, let’s get you a school uniform.” Ten minutes later, I was wearing a white skirt with blue along the bottom. I had a white shirt and a matching blue blazer on. Principal Tanaka looked at me approvingly, “Yes, a perfect fit. Now, let’s see. You’re in room 1A. Kondo Eiko is your teacher. Now, run along. Enjoy your time here!” I nodded and left. I walked down the school hallways until I saw a classroom that said 1A. I took a deep breath and knocked on the door. A second later, the door slid open. A woman with chocolate brown hair tied in a bun was standing there. She smiled. “Oh, you must be Edogawa Miyuki-san.” “Yes. And I’m assuming you’re Kondo-sensei?” The teacher nodded. She turned around. “Okay, class.” She announced. “Today, we have a new student.” The class started to whisper. “Come in, and introduce yourself, please.” I walked into the classroom next to the desk. I turned to face the class. “Hello, my name is Edogawa Miyuki. I’m from America. Please treat me well!” I bowed. The class started to whisper again. “She’s cute!” “Ew!” “Ooh, America?” “Edogawa? Isn’t that the name of the kid who’s Kaitou Kid’s rival?” “Edogawa-san, you can sit next to Ito Hitomi-san.” Kondo-sensei pointed to an empty seat next to a girl. She had long black hair tied in a braid. She was wearing glasses and blushed. I walked down the aisle and took a seat. “Hello,” I smiled “Hello.” Hitomi replied. “Okay, time to continue the class. What is 2x+5x-8y if x equals…” And the class went on. When it was lunchtime, a bunch of students crowded around my seat. “Nice to meet you, Edogawa-san!” “How was America?” “Do you like mysteries?” “Nice to meet you too! America was good. Yep, mysteries are awesome!” I answered smiling. “Is Edogawa Conan your brother?” I looked to see who asked that question. It was a girl with long blonde hair with hints of curls at the ends down to her waist, pulled into a ponytail and ice-cold blue eyes. I shivered. She was smirking, and I wondered why. “Uh, yes. Conan-kun is my little brother.” “Aw!” A bunch of girls squealed. “Conan is so cute and smart!” “Yup! That’s my little brother! So,” I looked over at the blonde. “What’s your name?” Another smirk. “My name’s Kuroki Aimi. If you’re wondering,” She added. “My mother was American and my father Japanese.” “Ah, I see.” Seems suspicious, I thought. I should keep an eye on her. Then I turned to the Hitomi. “Hi, so you’re name’s Hitomi?” I asked. She smiled and nodded. “Your eyes match your name.” I commented. Hitomi blushed. “May I call you Hitomi-chan?” “Sure.” “Do you wanna be friends?” Hitomi looked overjoyed. “Of course!” I grinned. “Then that’s settled.” My new friend and I talked for the rest of lunch. I learned that she’s a pretty shy person. She also doesn’t have any friends. I wondered why, she’s so nice. She also loves mysteries too! I think were gonna be great friends! After lunch, we had more schoolwork. I was very happy when the bell rang. Yes! I thought. Now I can meet Ayumi, Genta, and Mitsuhiko! And maybe Sonoko! Conan sighed. Kami-sama, did Chelsea have to embarrass him like that? Oh, well. He walked into the classroom. He was suddenly bombarded by Ayumi, Genta, and Mitsuhiko. “Is it true?” Ayumi demanded. “Huh? What?” Conan asked confused. Mitsuhiko sighed. “Conan-kun, is it true that you have a sister visiting from America?” Conan blinked. “Ye-yeah, it’s true. Wait, when did you hear that?” Genta pointed at Ai. “Haibara told us!” Conan walked up to Ai. “That was fast.” Ai shrugged. “I thought they should know.” “Oh, that’s right. Haibara, we need to talk after school. It has to do with Them.” She paled and nodded. “Ok, class!” Kobayashi-sensei called. “It’s time for class to begin!” The day passed quickly. When school got out, the fake child quickly told Ai what Chelsea had told him the previous night. Ai looked like she was about to faint. “They want you?” Ai muttered. “This is not good.” She grabbed Conan’s arm. “Kudo-kun, promise me you’ll be careful!” The said detective looked surprised, but smiled. “I promise.” “Oi, Conan, Haibara!” Genta shouted at them. “Hurry up, I wanna meet Conan’s neechan!” “Coming!” They called and ran to catch up with their three childhood friends. “What’s up, Ran?” Suzuki Sonoko asked her best friend. “Is something wrong?” Ran smiled. “No, I was just thinking.” “About what?” “Oh, that’s right! I haven’t told you yet!” Now, Sonoko looked confused. “Huh?” “Conan-kun has a thirteen year old sister named Miyuki-chan. She’s from America and is staying with us.” “WHAT? NO WAY! THAT BRAT HAS A SISTER?” Sonoko screamed. “SHHHHH!” Ran said urgently. Everyone was staring at them. “Uh, sorry. It’s nothing.” Ran told her classmates. Everyone went back to what they were doing. “Well,” Sonoko had recovered from her surprise. “I have to meet the brat’s sister. Can I meet her after school?” “Sure. I think Miyuki-chan would like that.” “Yeah!” I stretched my arms. “It feels great to be out of school! How about you?” I asked Hitomi. She giggled. “Yeah, me too.” “Now, I have to go find Ran-neechan and Conan-kun. Do you wanna come with me?” “Sure!” We ran off to find them. Did you like? It was okay? Comments please! Tell me if you liked it, or if it needs more work. Arigato~ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 11, 2011 well, i guess it's fine, but i feel that it was a bit rushed, and that the back and forth went by too quickly, i understand if they're short responses, but when it's a sentence, you need to break it up a bit... usually there's always something that can break up a convos neatly... well anyways... i just... don't think the personalities matched too well, and teh descriptions were a bit bland... otherwise, i did like it ^^ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Cindy-Chen 82 Report post Posted October 30, 2011 Nice! It's starting to come together! Hm....Moho didn't rate it... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
OldJustal 36 Report post Posted November 6, 2011 Detective Boys ... *Imagining chelsea in uniform ...* Nice part ! So far I really love this story Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites