HaibaraDaiFan 0 Report post Posted May 27, 2011 So I wanted to see what people's reactions were to this story, considering I didn't get much feedback on fanfiction.net by the time I reached my third chapter. I'll post chapter one here (it's really short) and if you want me to post more of it, tell me. I also want to know your opinion of both the idea and the actual written story. Thanks Presence I've given up things like hopes and dreams. I had held onto the thought that I could live a 'normal' life for the longest time. And now I find a life of death. Out of all this, someone has taken me in and taught me how to embrace this reality. "Sherry?" I still wasn't used to my codename. I turned to the person with the ice cold voice. Inside, I flinched. On the outside, I was unaffected. "What do you need?" My voice was just as cold, but his achieved some sort of level that I doubt was normal for any human being. He looked at me and smirked. "So you're Sherry." I glared. "What of it?" I didn't know who this guy was. He just waltzed into my lab. But judging from all of my researchers' actions, he must have some sort of power in this sick system. The cold smirk didn't leave his face. "I just wanted to see the little girl who was made of equal rank of me upon joining." Little girl? Did he want to die? "And you are?" My voice leveled out to a bored tone. If I needed to take this freak on, I would. However, I knew better than to react to foolish words. His facial expression still kept its smirk. "Gin." I waited for a moment, waiting for him to say what he wanted. Instead, he just stood there. I finally had enough of entertaining his presence. I walked past him and began to instruct one of my researchers. I felt a hand suddenly grab my right wrist, pull me to the right side, then another hand grabbed my left shoulder. His face was composed, but I could feel the anger radiating from him. My back was against the wall, literally. Unlike most people, I didn't struggle. I didn't show any fear. I simply looked at him, observing the look in his eyes. "Don't blow me off." He hissed. I frowned. "Your breath reeks of smoke." I stated simply. There was a pause. He then let go of me, and I watched, half astonished, as he began to erupt with a low laughter. Everyone in my lab was staring. He then straightened up. His eyes still managed to look dead cold. "Meet me at the warehouse in an hour. Anokata released you for a mission." He walked out of the lab, his presence leaving a tenseness that had never been reached here. This entire place was evil, clothed in black, fear, and malicious ideas. But he had made it feel more intense, more sickening to my stomach. I returned to instructing the researcher from a few minutes ago. After finishing, I began to make my way to my own personal computer. An e-mail was waiting on it. Sherry, Gin is your partner for your first official mission. He'll be your leader. No failure accepted. I glared at the screen. I had only gotten a few messages from the boss, and every message he sent ended with those words. No failure accepted. I gritted my teeth and deleted the message. After completing what I needed to, I traded my white lab coat for a dark brown jacket of mine and walked swiftly out the door. I stopped a few feet from the warehouse. I could sense his presence, although it was too dark for me to see the man clad in all black. "Yo, Sherry." Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted May 27, 2011 Oh, i read this. I think I reviewed, but maybe I didn't have time. It's actually pretty good! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted May 27, 2011 Not off to a bad start...maybe I didn't catch this one on FF.net? Oh well. Oh, and I recommended your story, Illusion, to S. She was creeped out by it. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
