Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 5, 2012 @KKLT: Well, Shannon is just someone who most likely had met with me since I seem to trust in her. World Government? Sounds like One Piece... @Moho: I agree with KKLT. You 't just retcon everything that doesn't fit in your plans. Would you mind of sharing some with us? Like I have said earlier we are mind-readers. Oh, Kirite appeared... Is that permanental or temporal visit? Haha I know~ But I am referring to a concept, a single common authority for the world. Have you heard of the New World Order theory? But if you refer to One Piece, I guess its alright too XDDDD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted April 5, 2012 (edited) Then would you mind sharing that "plan" of yours? I can't continue writing according to MY plans and have you retcon everything cause it doesn't fit yours. It would be just a waste of time... I think I'll just stop here for a while and wait to see what you are going to implement before I go totally the opposite direction. This is going to take a while: The Organization decided to stir up commotion by attacking the 7 wonders of the world, and deployed the Seven Man Band (more commonly known as the Doremi Squad) to attack/destroy them. Lash is in charge of the Doremi Squad, and is in charge of attacking CN Tower. She can regurgitate weapons from her stomach. The other members of the Doremi Squad are Coda, Fine, Dolche, Stradivarius, Andante, and Forte. I haven't decided which of the wonders they would attack yet. Coda is second-in-command of the Doremi Squad. His marksmanship is tops. Fine is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. He fights with his bare fists. Dolche is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. She fights by using her singing abilities to incapitate the opponent. Stradivarius is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. He fights with two-handed swords. Andante is a low ranking member of the Doremi Squad. She fights with one sword. As for Forte, he's gonna be kept a secret for now. The Organization's motive is to cause world war, then once the nations of the world are badly weakened, they will forcibly take over the world for themselves, creating a New World Order. And more regarding Remilia. Remilia holds a grudge against Nero because she believes Nero killed Remilia's sister, Laela. Is this sufficent? Edited April 14, 2012 by Mohorovicic Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 5, 2012 This is going to take a while: The Organization decided to stir up commotion by attacking the 7 wonders of the world, and deployed the Seven Man Band (more commonly known as the Dofemi Squad) to attack/destroy them. Lash is in charge of the Doremi Squad, and is in charge of attacking CN Tower. She can regurgitate weapons from her stomach. The other members of the Doremi Squad are Coda, Fine, Dolche, Stradivarius, Andante, and Forte. I haven't decided which of the wonders they would attack yet. Coda is second-in-command of the Doremi Squad. His marksmanship is tops. Fine is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. He fights with his bare fists. Dolche is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. She fights by using her singing abilities to incapitate the opponent. Stradivarius is a high ranking member of the Doremi Squad. He fights with two-handed swords. Andante is a low ranking member of the Doremi Squad. She fights with one sword. The Organization's motive is to cause world war, then once the nations of the world are badly weakened, they will forcibly take over the world for themselves, creating a New World Order. And more regarding Remilia. Remilia holds a grudge against Nero because she believes Nero killed Remilia's sister, Laela. Is this sufficent? Awesome. The way you used musical expressions and related terms is cool~ Oh and forgive me but... is Lash related to music too? XD And btw... The progression of the plot is cool with me~ Yep~ ----------------------------------- "World Government!?" WH yelled without thinking. "Shhhhushh... Not so loud!" "Sorry..." "John... If this information is THAT secret..." KKLT crossed her arms suspiciously. "I know what you want to ask girl..." John closed his eyes and took a deep breath. "I am a member of this 'World government' group." "What!? Then wouldn't you be penalized if you let out the secret? If THEY are soooo cautious as they said, would they not have implemented some prevention measure?" "..." John smirked. "You are smart. Of course they do." John invited himself to a seat. "With such a secretive organization, there is no way they would not have any plans to shut the mouths of these people willingly." "Then how...?" "Have you heard of the idiom, dead man tells no tales?" "WHAT!? THEY'RE GOING TO KILL YOU!?" "Nonono... Calm down... Don't be too agitated." John's smile slowly faded. "What I'm saying is... I'm already... dead." Silence filled the room. Everyone looked at John with eyes wide open, shocked from the sudden revelation. "Dea-dead? Wha-what do you mean?" "Haha... Don't worry. It's not a taboo topic any more." John sighed. "So you are serious." KKLT felt herself tense up. "Yes... Ever heard of the memory drug?" "Yea. We've had experience with that." IU replied while looking over at Chelsea. "What about it? Wait... Don't tell me..." "Heh... Even though you're kids, you catch on quick." John grinned a little. "Well, as you all might have understood, I am actually dead and this John that you are looking at now, is someone else with my previous memories." "!!!!!!!!!" "For an organization like THEM, they need people who do, and do not exist at the same time... I was the only one nominated by the top tiers of the FBI to be the next Director of FBI... And so... me... and my entire family... have to be killed... and I was then... reborn... with this body." KKLT felt herself flinch. The atmosphere was tense. "Haha~ Can you imagine they actually went this far to protect themselves? People with a huge unspeakable secret themselves... this weakness is something they make use of to keep the members in check. Something like a trade. They keep your secret, you keep theirs." John laughed coldly as though he was mocking himself. "As a double security, they even edit some of their memories to fit their objectives. Even if this does not work, and the members end up betraying THEM, it will not deal them much damage at all. To tell you the truth, the information that I just shared is nothing, useless to THEM. If it were any important, I would have already been assassinated by other members by now." "..." Everyone was silent. Nobody dared make any comment after hearing those words. "Oh don't make that kind of faces kids. I've already looked past that. The Commissioner already knew about my secret. The fact that I am still here and not behind bars is due to the Police head commissioner helping me. Therefore, I will live my life protecting the world and FBI. But now, it is a dire situation. And... I will require help from you guys..." A smile surfaced on some of their faces and everyone gave an acknowledging look to each other. "...Heh. Is that how you ask for a favour from others, old guy?" KKLT joked. "To ask a favour, you'd need something like good food and drinks." "Well, I suggest that new Spaghetti restaurant that opened around the corner." IU added in. "I prefer Japanese food." "We should go for a buffet! How about hotpot?" "You kids... " a gentle smile slowly emerged on his face. "Thanks..." "Heh. Don't worry. We are already mixed up in this. Oh and stop calling us kids..." "Yea... I will take note of that. Oh anyway, just so you know... I might be a Director but I am actually quite poor..." "YOU LIAR!!!!!!" ---------------------------------------------- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted April 5, 2012 I don't think Nero really trusts people completely. :V It's hard to tell- even if he doesn't, if it's advantageous to him, he'll pretend he trusts you, only to turn his back later. I'm starting to get confused- I want to clear things up before I write something that makes no sense whatsoever. Did Chaos get rescued? What's going on with Laela? And... where am I? Ah, BTW, Tsukiko... Here's what I have done so far of your request. Do you like it? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wildheart888 170 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 @KKLT-chan: Whoaa, that was awesome!! Plot twists FTW~ xPP Aeyra-chan, the drawing's really nice! ^^ You're improving fast~ b^.^d And Mohawk-kun........nice. xD Ah yes~ Tsuki-chan! Yay, you're finally conversin' with us! xP Alrighty now...I've talked too much. xP But only because I haven't been here in a while...>.< Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 I don't think Nero really trusts people completely. :V It's hard to tell- even if he doesn't, if it's advantageous to him, he'll pretend he trusts you, only to turn his back later. I'm starting to get confused- I want to clear things up before I write something that makes no sense whatsoever. Did Chaos get rescued? What's going on with Laela? And... where am I? Ah, BTW, Tsukiko... Here's what I have done so far of your request. Do you like it? Hmmm... Chaos should have gotten rescued eventually. I left a day's gap in between for Moho to add on the details. How he got rescued and whether or not he is still 'whole' or alive I did not mention. I just wrote it in such a way that YOU think that Nero got him back from CN tower after the attack at that place. Whether or not it is true is up to you and Moho~ ----------------------- @WH: Yea~ Like it? :P I had other twisted plans though but too much would make it too complicated so I decided to just include some interesting ones And it all happens to fit with what was previously written so... XDDDD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 Finished Chaos and Laela. :V I'll make a thread for it in a little bit. :3 Wanted to share it here first. Chaos was infinitesimally easier than Laela. Just saying. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Anti-APTX4869 181 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 @Story Writers HMmm.. I'm not sure how to fit in to this story lol. I'll just watch what's going to happen... sounds fun. @Aeyra O_o I don't know how to catch up to you anymore *laughs* that's really neat. ...*get popcorn and soda, sits in front of computer, refreshing page, waiting to read the next plot...* Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 Finished Chaos and Laela. :V I'll make a thread for it in a little bit. :3 Wanted to share it here first. Chaos was infinitesimally easier than Laela. Just saying. Chaos seem to stem from shinichi! Lol awesome work! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 Finished Chaos and Laela. :V I'll make a thread for it in a little bit. :3 Wanted to share it here first. Chaos was infinitesimally easier than Laela. Just saying. Chaos seem to stem from shinichi! Lol awesome work! ^This. And how did you do the grass? It looks great. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Anti-APTX4869 181 Report post Posted April 6, 2012 ^This. And how did you do the grass? It looks great. ^this Tons of work if it's hand drawn... O_o... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted April 7, 2012 ^This. And how did you do the grass? It looks great. I downloaded a bunch of realistic looking grass brushes from the internet. XD Since I can't draw scenery for my life (and because my mom was kind of 'get off the computer NOW' while I was finishing it), I just used the brushes, and Presto! Awesomeness! I basically use SAI to draw and color and Photoshop for all the touch-up brushes like the grass. ^^ That's why I do digital art. I could never draw grass. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 9, 2012 Hi everyone! I'm back! I was the whole Easter somewhere where I had no chance to go online ;_; Anyways, great job Aya! I love it! :grin: I wanna write but I have no ideas... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted April 10, 2012 I wanna write but I just spent the past two hours writing fanfiction and should be sleeping. :V also, I forget what's going on. :/ Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 10, 2012 Okay, I'll write now. It's Shannon time! -- -- -- Shannon drove aimlessly around the streets. She had to admit herself that she was worried about Leah - or Laela, depending on who was talking about that girl. For Shannon she had always been Leah but for the girl's late team mates she had always been known as Laela. "They probably don't even know her real name..." The woman sighed as she stopped to traffic lights. Then there was also the group of Tsukiko's friends. Bunch of kids who weren't aware of the backrounds so well. "But it's just good. They don't need to know. They would just worry even more about their friend." "I'm pathetic..." About five weeks ago "Why in earth we are in New Jersey? I'd rather be somewhere else." Rod complained. Shannon sighed. It had continued the whole way there. That complaining. "Oh, shut up Rod. We were asked to came here and that's it. Besides isn't it nice to get out from the HQ for the change?" Iram lit a cigarette. "If you drop any ashes on the floor I'll make you pay." Shannon mumbled on a low voice. For some reason she had chosen to disguise as a man in the organization. It was easy but she didn't know why. And it had became easier about a year ago, after she had gone over her dear friend's - Laela's - death. "But I guess I can't really get over it. Never..." Shannon thought and speeded up. When they turned around the corner she was already overspeeding. And someone was crossing that street. The girl froze and turned to look at the car and Shannon. "Leah...?" Shannon hit the break. The girl blinked but soon her expression changed. She walked to the open window next to Shannon. "Mitä helvettiä oikein kuvittelet tekeväsi?! Oletko sunnuntaikaahari, tai jotain?!" She shouted. "Näit varmasti aivan selvästi, että olin ylittämässä tietä! Sitä paitsi olit hyvin todennäköisesti ajamassa ylinopeutta!" Shannon didn't understand the word of what the girl was saying but realized soon that the girl wasn't Leah. Even though she really resembled her. Both in appearance and in the way she spoke. "Get in." Shannon said with a low voice. She didn't realize herself why did she do so. Rod and Iram pulled the girl inside the van. -- "What was I thinking?" Shannon thought hard when they headed to their temporal base. With her other ear she listened what Rod told to the girl, Tsukiko. "If I was you I would be more quiet. Our driver is pretty short-tempered. He gets annoyed easily. I mean he ordered you in only because you annoyed him. And he might be planing how to kill you. But now there might come a little twist in his plan 'cause we know that you are one of those other girls." He said but Iram hit his head. "You're too talkative. She doesn't need to know that much, Rod." The older man stated. "Rod? So you have a name too..." Shannon heard a grin in the girl's voice. "And you look too happy for being a person who had just got kidnapped." Rod answered. "Mark surely kills you after taking care of the others." -- Shannon talked with Rod through a radio. The man had just taken the girl to a cell. "Yeah, the cell was empty. And I'm sure it's the same one where the others were..." "If that idiot has already shot them I'm gonna kill him..." Shannon mumbled. She had to keep up the cover she had created during the years in the organization. "Why?" "Because I wanted to be the one who shoots them! Or at least see when he finishes them off! "I see. But now we have a new one. Maybe you can ask Mark if you can kill her." Rod responded and shut down his radio. Shannon sighed. Rod was right. She really wanted to kill the girl but not because of killing. It was because she was afraid. Shannon was afraid what might happen to the girl if she'd stay alive. Iram most likely had noticed how much the girl resembled Laela. Back to the real time "And after all I made a call to him when she couldn't escape with us. Even though I knew what he had been doing to Leah... I am so pathetic." Shannon leaned against the wheel. The words from that moment were haunting in her mind. --- --- Okay. I finally finished this. The original NJ part in on the page 41 if you wanna read it. BTW, I finished another drawing: Click me. Click me now! I guess you can recognize them all. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 12, 2012 (edited) Guess what? Today, during lessons, I drew what Lash and Coda would look like. Lash Coda Edited April 12, 2012 by Tsukiko Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 Tsukiko, that Lash picture is absolutely beautiful. Exactly the way I imagined her. <3 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 Tsukiko, that Lash picture is absolutely beautiful. Exactly the way I imagined her. <3 Thank you, she is really creepy and twisted, right? How about Coda? Or have paid any attention to him except the name and skills? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 oooh.. Nice Tsukiko~ Hahah I come back after a few days to see that there has been no progress to the story~~~ Except for drawings~ XDDDD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 Thanks KKLT! BTW I have drawn Dolche, too. Read from the pic for more info. Here. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 Oooh I like this one. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 13, 2012 Oooh I like this one. I'm really bored during lessons... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted April 14, 2012 (Back on topic, please. ^^) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted April 14, 2012 (Back on topic, please. ^^) Apologies, moderator. :3 XD I'd write, but I have seriously no idea what's going on anymore since the Doremi Squad came in. :/ (hasn't had time to read) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted April 14, 2012 (Back on topic, please. ^^) Tsk, says someone who hasn't written here in ages... nvm... I'd like to write but I have a writer's block right now... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
