Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 XD I love it~ Nero with a cheerful outlook and a dark past XD <33333333 awesome!!!!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Great job as usual Aeyra. *returns to writing Taken* Yay! You're writing it? You'll have to give me a recap... Your story's too long for me to reread all the way! XD (I also just finished a chapter of my DC fanfic, 'The Murder of Shinichi Kudo'... I'm in the editing what my beta told me to edit process. ) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Yay! You're writing it? You'll have to give me a recap... Your story's too long for me to reread all the way! XD (I also just finished a chapter of my DC fanfic, 'The Murder of Shinichi Kudo'... I'm in the editing what my beta told me to edit process. ) Recap...I'll add that in to the beginning. I'll publish the chapter after my beta edits it and then I'll get back on track with it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wildheart888 170 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Awsomeness, Aeyra-chan~!!!!! xDDDDDDDDDD And hii, Akechi-kun!! x) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Sorry, but now I'm completely confused. Right now Nero and Chaos are breaking into the jail where Mark is supposedly being held, and we're all watching them on a screen from bugs Nero planted on himself. I'm pretty sure Chelsea was with us then, and therefore you all are. I simply can't change all of my entries that much, Tsukiko. I was planning to just take a few names out and replace them, but now this is straying a bit too far. The flashbacks aren't really too necessary... What's important is discovering Mark's death and the message he left behind. And earlier when you said nobody can challenge you, I felt that was slightly rude. We're just trying to help you write a piece that fits in better with the others. All of the entries that came before were laid in stone, and you shouldn't be knocking them down. Read them carefully, if you're confused, ask what's happened, and try to make your storyline fit in. For example, you could have edited your library scene to make it on the train. I don't mind your flashbacks, I'm just hoping you're not going to have Chaos fall in love with you or vice versa. Chaos is the kind of guy who can only love one person their entire life. As that probably was not your intention, I'm sorry if that insulted you, but I wanted to tell you to try to make your additions match up with the rest of the story, because lately, they feel out of place. WHAT?! Now I'm confused too. I thought that: 1. We were scattered in different groups around NY and Aya's group(Aya, Pyre, Misaki and Nero) found out about Mark's execution 2. They contacted KKLT's group(KKLT, BK, Chaos and maybe someone else) and met up with them. 3. Took a train to NJ and had a conversation.(Where they planned something. I'm too lazy to repeat everything) And my plans: 1. We got a call from Pyre to stay where we are because if something happens to them or elsewhere we have to be ready to move. 2. We didn't obey that order and take a train to NJ. 3. Chelsea desided to look for you if you might be in same train. But it's possible that you gave us a call when your train was leaving the station and we are in another one now. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wildheart888 170 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 *sighh* Now I'm confused too...xP Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 WHAT?! Now I'm confused too. I thought that: 1. We were scattered in different groups around NY and Aya's group(Aya, Pyre, Misaki and Nero) found out about Mark's execution 2. They contacted KKLT's group(KKLT, BK, Chaos and maybe someone else) and met up with them. 3. Took a train to NJ and had a conversation.(Where they planned something. I'm too lazy to repeat everything) And my plans: 1. We got a call from Pyre to stay where we are because if something happens to them or elsewhere we have to be ready to move. 2. We didn't obey that order and take a train to NJ. 3. Chelsea desided to look for you if you might be in same train. But it's possible that you gave us a call when your train was leaving the station and we are in another one now. What Actually Happened: 1. We split up into different groups and travelled on different types of transportation (bus, subway, taxi) to meet at one central location in NYC. My group found out about the execution because I picked up a newspaper, and we showed it to everyone once e got to the central location. (a luxury hotel) And then everyone (everyone everyone) headed to the train station for NJ. 2. Nero said he thought it was a trap on the train, and he thought Mark was already dead. 3. Once in NJ, we're in a secluded area a few miles away from the prison Mark supposedly is being held. Nero says he wants to do the mission alone with Chaos, runs off with bugs attached, and ends up breaking down as he tells Chaos his past. ----------------------------------------------------------------- So according to the story, except for when we were traveling to the central location, we were all together. What point is there in leaving a small group behind? Separate to confuse the enemy, stay together to be stronger. Pyre wouldn't tell you to stay behind. And besides, you were with us the whole time, it's what I've been trying to say. So next time, don't be afraid to ask specifics. We don't want huge misinterpretations that end up confusing everybody when we write back-to-back. XD, just noticed something. You sound just like my friend when she's discussing manga she misinterpreted with me!!! XDDD She's always like 'WHAT?! WHY?! I'm confused!!!!!' Sigh... I miss my friend. (she moved to Conneticutt. But I get to contact her by email at least...) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wildheart888 170 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Oohhh...I see now..so we DID split up..for a while..oops, didn't catch that..xPP Lol..thanks Aeyra-chan!! xD I do hope you get it now, Tsuki-chan..are you still confused..? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Yes and no. But this means that I've to edit all my previous parts. NOOOOO!!! Too lazy, I'm leaving you in confusion. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 That's not fair... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Monsi 51 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 What Actually Happened: 1. We split up into different groups and travelled on different types of transportation (bus, subway, taxi) to meet at one central location in NYC. My group found out about the execution because I picked up a newspaper, and we showed it to everyone once e got to the central location. (a luxury hotel) And then everyone (everyone everyone) headed to the train station for NJ. 2. Nero said he thought it was a trap on the train, and he thought Mark was already dead. 3. Once in NJ, we're in a secluded area a few miles away from the prison Mark supposedly is being held. Nero says he wants to do the mission alone with Chaos, runs off with bugs attached, and ends up breaking down as he tells Chaos his past. ----------------------------------------------------------------- So according to the story, except for when we were traveling to the central location, we were all together. What point is there in leaving a small group behind? Separate to confuse the enemy, stay together to be stronger. Pyre wouldn't tell you to stay behind. And besides, you were with us the whole time, it's what I've been trying to say. So next time, don't be afraid to ask specifics. We don't want huge misinterpretations that end up confusing everybody when we write back-to-back. XD, just noticed something. You sound just like my friend when she's discussing manga she misinterpreted with me!!! XDDD She's always like 'WHAT?! WHY?! I'm confused!!!!!' Sigh... I miss my friend. (she moved to Conneticutt. But I get to contact her by email at least...) At last...!!! Everything's clear now... Thanks, Aeyra! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 At last...!!! Everything's clear now... Thanks, Aeyra! OMG.... CUTE!!!!!!!!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 ***** "Nero, was it really the best choice to just run off and leave them like that?" asked Chaos dubiously, matching his sprinting friend stride for stride. "They'll be pissed as hell when we get back." "Doesn't matter, I'm the one who knows how to use that credit card correctly. Therefore, if they are pissed with me, I shall simply refuse to help, and use all the money to buy Starbucks. You hear that?" snickered Nero right into the bug, causing everyone on the other end to either roll their eyes or glare. Glaring seemed to be the popular option. "Sometimes I wonder if he's just trying to annoy us," muttered Misaki, grumbling under her breath. She liked Nero fine, but he was starting to get a bit too bold and daring. Nope, the funny, whiny, overly dramatic, happy-happy Nero was more to her preference. It was like he had taken over in less than a week. "He's just trying to lighten the atmosphere... I think," said Aeyra unconvincingly, drawing a small chuckle from Chelsea. "I wish he'd worn an earpiece though.. So we could talk to them." "I'm guessing he didn't want to listen to our complaints," sighed Pyre, who was tense waiting for the news on Mark. "He'd just turn the stupid thing off." "Perhaps..." said Tsukiko, peering over Chelsea's shoulder to watch the prison appear closer and closet on the iTouch screen as Nero approached. "He must be pretty desperate to go alone with Chaos though... Why else would he voluntarily use bugs? They're like an invasion of privacy." "He could turn them off if he wanted to though," noted Aeyra, recalling Nero's words. "He said he can disarm them at will." As if at her command, the screen suddenly went black and everything was silent. "Please tell me all that happened was that he disarmed them." ****** Luckily for everyone, that was the case. Nero's true intentions of bringing out Chaos was to share the secret he'd hidden for ten years, a memory that threatened to explode within him. It was just about impossible to find time alone to talk to his best friend- and even then the chance of being overheard was tremendous. And as for disabling the bugs- who ever said Nero would play fair. "Nero, did you just turn off the camera and mike?" asked Chaos curiously, neither mad nor happy. "Yup." "Why?" Chaos's blue eyes shone with concern. Everything Nero did had a reason- and there was something simply burning behind all that verdant emerald green. "I wanted to tell you. My past. Ever since John brought it up, I couldn't help but remember it, all that blood, the knife, the guns, the everything." Nero felt tears at the corners of his eyes. I will not cry... he told himself strongly. He blinked hard, clearing his vision of the mist. "Take as much time as you need, buddy. You asked me out here because I'm your best friend and you know I don't give a damn about rescuing Mark, right?" Chaos gave Nero a comforting smile. Nero was there for all his breakdowns, a solid pillar to lean against. He going to be Nero's pillar asking as the younger boy needed him. "Well, I've manages to figure out finer details over the years, but here's the deal. I was born to a wealthy family, and my parents were world-class scientists in the fields of weaponry, and essentially physics as well. Apparently, I showed great talent for developing weapons at a very young age, I was also adept at planning, had a very high intelligence, and what was best for the Organization, so, so young." Nero shook as they approached the jail, the memory of blood's rusty scent, the screams, the dark men who charged into his house. "It was just after my parents had tucked me in- I was about to fall asleep when I heard my mother scream, and my father's yell, and the tumult of pained screeching that came after. They were shooting my parents, Chaos. They were torturing them for fun." Chaos pulled Nero behind a few bushes, hiding themselves from sight. He patted his friend awkwardly on the head, a gesture for him to know he was still there as Nero told his story. "I got out of bed and headed for the first floor, and in the kitchen were the bodies of my mother and father, both so mauled, mangled, and bloody that I could hardly recognize them. There were men jeering at their corpses, men in black with masks over their faces, sneering as they faced me. Even then, I knew immediately that they had killed my parents. And at five years old, I felt the need to vengeance. And.... I massacred them. "There was a knife in my father's hand, and I picked it up as one of the men tried to grab me. I stabbed him in the arm, the leg, the stomach, everywhere I could reach, and he keeled over, dying. I could feel that sticky, warm, blood all over mr, my father's blood on the knife handle, the blood splattered all over my body when it spurted out from the man I'd murdered. They were all so horrified. But I didn't stop there. I didn't stop there." Nero saw that red haze covering his eyes all over again, that crimson shroud of hate that told him to kill, to kill, to kill. "I stabbed every last one of them to death. My white pajamas were soaked in red, the tiles didn't have a single spot where blood didn't cover it, the floor was sticky and warm, and I just stood there, looking at what I'd done. "Then I just broke down and cried, collapsing into that puddle of blood next to my parents, holding their hands until I fell asleep, and when I woke up the next morning, I was at the Organization HQ. I didn't learn until later they sent the people to kill mom and dad. They praised me, and I thrived on the things they taught me. I was just a five year old kid. But I was, and am, a monster, Chaos. I see it in my dreams all the time, holding that knife, every last one of you bleeding out in front me, I see my parents, eyes cold with death, their blood on my hands, and I hardly even sleep just so I don't have to see it." Nero was crying now, holding Chaos's collar, and sobbing into his friend's shoulder. "Chaos, what do I do?" "I don't know, Nero, but I'm glad you told me. You needed that out of your system," assured Chaps gently, holding still as his friend's trembling rocked through his body. "It's going to be fine. You're not a monster, you just wanted revenge, like I want revenge for Laela. Don't be ashamed, Nero, and don't be afraid." "But I can't help being afraid," whispered Nero, fingers clenching into a fist. "How could I?" "Accept it, let your friends help you." Chaos's eyes shone with his own experiences in grief, and Nero looked up, normally bright eyes almost black. "You did it for me, and I'll be here for you." "Thank you, Chaos..." ******** That's Nero's past for you. Very bloody, very traumatic. Somehow, I don't think Nero'll make it into the jail. Chaos'll probably end up doing it alone while making sure Nero doesn't move. What did you think of Nero's past? Personally, I find imagining it frightens me... Sigh... Its really quiet now... Maybe I should try continuing... --------------- "Wha-!!!!!!!!" KKLT exclaimed when the iTouch screen suddenly turned blank. "He really turned off the bugs!" "I guess he really had something he didn't want to share with us then..." Aeyra shrugged as she turned away from the device. Everyone let out a groan. "Awww... I really wanted to see what happened..." Tsukiko complained as she crossed her arms in disappointment. "Yea... I wonder what happened..." Misaki sighed. "I wish we could be let in on this..." "That idiot..." muttered KKLT, "... even though he promised to let us join, he still left us all here... Who cares about the credit card... I'll get him when he comes back...grr..." "Come on... relax Legend~" Chelsea chuckled, "Its not like he's dating you and now leaving for another girl..." "Not funny Chelsea." KKLT glared at her. "Sorry~" Chelsea stuck out her tongue as some others resisted a laugh. "But now that he turned off the bugs, we can't even know what is happening..." KKLT lowered her head worriedly, "or whether they are safe... and Mark too..." "I'm sure they are fine." Aeyra answered confidently. "We know those two well. They're not to be underestimated. Chaos is not our leader for no reason, and Nero... too..." Aeyra's voice trailed away at the part about Nero. "... They're gonna be fine. Trust them." "Don't worry." Krev added in. "I'm sure they will be fine even if a nuclear bomb lands on them! They're invincible!" "Krev!" Brise chidded him for his dangerous joke as Krev shrugs in response. "Well, just be prepared for their return." Brise smiled at KKLT and everyone. "Await for news then..." *click* "Hey guys, everybody!!!!!" Chelsea yelled at the rest who turned their heads in surprise. "Bzz..Rrkkkk....Hey guys! Sorry for the silence... Was enjoying some private moments with my little Chaos for a while just now but..." A little yell of annoyance was heard in the background, "...Your Nero-sama is back on the line~!!!" Everyone gathered back at the iTouch. It seems like Nero and Chaos has successfully infiltrated the premise. The surroundings look a little dark... It seems like they're already in the prison grounds. Goodluck guys... KKLT and everyone prayed. ----------------------- Can we please just do something??? D: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Okay, maybe I'll edit my parts a bit. But I have no ideas how so I'm not doing it now... Help!!! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 How about you just disregard them and write some more in later? It's too confusing itf everyone has to go back and reread it all. Oh, and good job, KKLT. Though I don't think Nero would recover so quickly, or even at all.... And I don't think Nero knows Japanese/ Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 *reads KKLT's post* Anybody notice a small coincidence that I haven't talked? *disappears in story* Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 I did a little note to my lastest continuation. So, I didn't delete it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Akechi 1 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 Okay, it goes like this. We all met up in New Jersey with innocent intentions. (excluding Mark.) The events that happened before Mark came in and decided to destroy us are kind of blurry, and besides, they're not important. Mark came in with the intention to kill us, I forgot why, but he attempted to murder all of us multiple times, we escaped, met up with everyone else, Mark saved me and Chelsea while our plane crashed on the way to Canada, and everyone else wasn't on the plane, they were on a van or something of the sort. In Canada, we had epic battles, we believed Mark dead, and so on, so on, blah, blah, blah, most important things you need to know now are the newest characters, Chaos, Nero, Brise, and Krev, Organization members who've joined us, Chaos has a girl he loved named Laela, but she was killed by Mark. Nero has a hidden secret he's never told anybody, but it's really dark. (I'm planning on revealing that... tonight.) Brise and Krev like each other, but are too shy to try and date in case it hurts Chaos. Right now, Mark has been executed, but we don't know that for certain. We're going to 'rescue him', and Chaos and Nero are doing the rescue because Nero literally forced us to stay behind or run to our deaths. Nero... sigh, what are we going to do with you? XD (BTW, Nero loves coffee, loves it, loves it, loves it.) If you're planning to add yourself in, here's a method you could use. Nero is recruiting teenage Organization members from over the world, so if you're one of them, we could meet you somewhere. Just use the name Akechi and you're set! But wait for a good moment, or tell someone and they can write you in. ^^ Thanks. (For 100 pages, though, that's more easily summarized than I would imagine, xD) I don't think I'd be of much use, though, so I'll stay in the audience for the moment. Looks like this'll be a lot of fun to read, . Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted September 7, 2011 I just noticed i got reps for some of my posts... Who gave me the ghost reps? XD Oh, and thanks for taking the time to clarify your entries, Tsukiko. It'll save confusion later. I'll write later tonight, seeing as I have to do my homework... First full day of high school!!!! I found out the seniors dislike us measly freshmen. But who cares? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tsukiko 73 Report post Posted September 8, 2011 I wanna photo my newest drawing. But the lighting is poor... Gaaah! Any guesses what I have drawn? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 8, 2011 How about you just disregard them and write some more in later? It's too confusing itf everyone has to go back and reread it all. Oh, and good job, KKLT. Though I don't think Nero would recover so quickly, or even at all.... And I don't think Nero knows Japanese/ Yea let's make pipichan run away again Oh let's take it that Nero is pretending to be alright~ since bugs don't show his face... And about Japanese, maybe he played too much nintendo and learnt some basics in the process XDDDD lol Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 8, 2011 What's wrong par-chan? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted September 8, 2011 Yea let's make pipichan run away again Oh let's take it that Nero is pretending to be alright~ since bugs don't show his face... And about Japanese, maybe he played too much nintendo and learnt some basics in the process XDDDD lol Yay I get used as the main entertainment and run away. :V Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted September 8, 2011 Yay I get used as the main entertainment and run away. :V Im glad you're happy about it. :V Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
