Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Hello~! This is my very first fanfic, so I hope you enjoy! I'd like to thank Forever Lost for betaing my story! Thanks Je-chan! DISCLAIMER: DC doesn't belong to me, blah blah blah, but Hanako does. --------------- “They’re gone. We defeated them.” My voice sliced through the silence of the graveyard as I sat on the ground, my head hanging low. I continued, “After five long years... And with the help of the FBI, KID and Hattori-kun, we defeated them... They’re going to jail.... forever.” The area was silent before the wind began to talk and play with my hair. I reached up and brushed it behind my ear as I looked up and read the name on the tombstone. No matter what, I could never believe it... The fact that he was dead... He had always seemed to cheat death, over and over, and come back to me. But no matter how many times I read the name, it wouldn’t change the fact that he was dead and gone. Tears threatened to pour down my face as my thoughts wandered to him. His smiles, his laughs, his kisses.... The tears dropped slowly to the ground before picking up a more rapid pace. I screamed, “DAMN IT! Why... Why did you go... You baka! Baka, baka, baka! Why did you have to leave me, alone.... SHINICHI!” My voice carried out throughout the graveyard as I grew silent. I began to play with my black skirt as a soft wind kissed my tear-stained face. Baro~! You’re not alone! I jumped at the almost non-existent voice and said, “Shi-Shinichi?” You have Hanako, right? So you’re not alone! On cue, the young five year old girl, with her hands cupped, raced towards me and excitedly shouted, “Look mommy! Hanako found a butterfly!” Hanako opened her hands to reveal it, its delicate wings a scarlet red. The butterfly began to flap its wings and ascended into the air before landing on the tombstone. I looked at the butterfly for a minute, entranced by its red wings. The wings reminded me of blood, which reminded me of him: the stupid murder magnet. As I kept looking at it, Hanako asked, “Mommy? What’s wrong?” as she stepped in front of me. She noticed my tear-streaked face and continued, “Mommy, why were you crying?” I gently wiped my eyes before looking sweetly at my child and assured, “Nothing Hana-chan. I’m fine.” A smile decorated her face as she happily said, “Hanako is glad! Hanako doesn’t want Mommy sad, not at all!” I smiled back caringly as I stood up and gently brushed off the dirt on my skirt and legs. I then took her hand and began to walk towards the gate. “Mommy?” I looked down to meet my daughter’s cobalt eyes, much like her father’s, as I asked, “Yes Hana-chan?” She continued, “Whose grave were you at?” I smiled sadly, “Someone who meant a lot to me... And someone who I wished you could have met...” The fact that Hanako didn’t ask more questions must mean that she gets that I don’t really want to talk about it. Smart, just like him... She takes after him quite a bit... If only she was able to meet him... If only... If only you hadn’t run into Gin that night, if only I had stopped you, if only you didn’t get involved with Them, if only, IF ONLY! But if you hadn’t... I would have never met you... And I would have never fallen for you... My hands would still be unknowingly bloodstained. I might be dead and would not had been blessed with Hanako. I would have never met all the kind people in my life... I wouldn’t be happy. A small smile crept onto my face as I looked at the sky. It shone with a mixture of red, orange and yellow. It was so pretty, yet so painful to look at... It reminds me of you after all, when we had that case. She wanted a picture so badly, and in the end, we got it just in time. I still have it... How could I throw it away? She was a great friend to me, so were the boys, despite my cold demeanor towards them. As Hanako and I exited the graveyard, I looked back at his tombstone once more before turning away and asking, “What do you want for dinner Hana-chan?” “Curry please! With lots of meat too!” A giggle escaped my mouth as I smiled, “Ok! Lets get home then, alright?” She nodded as we began to walk to the car. As she began to happily sing a song about curry (on-tune, thankfully), I heard a voice speak to me quietly. The same voice from before. I love you. A soft smile lit up my face as I replied quietly, almost a whisper, “I love you too...” “Mommy? Who are you talking to?” I looked down to see my daughter looking at me with a funny look on her face. I said, “No one honey. Only the wind.” She looked at me for a second before going back to singing her Curry Song. As we entered the car and began to drive home, I heard him again, one last time. Take care... Shiho.... 3 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Forever Lost 55 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 WAIT WAIT WAIT. You probably already told me this but.. YOUR FIRST FANFIC?! That is freaking awesome for a first fanfic T.T My current ones are hardly this good and I've been writing (not posting though o.o) for a long time.. *clapclapclapclapclap* Vereh good~ Although I've already told you that ^.- Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Well, I guess a better word would be "First completed fanfic". I'm doing a DC fanfic for Sayuri, but I don't really consider it much of a story.... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Forever Lost 55 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 XDD Still! That's amazing o.o Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Not really... (^///^)> But thank you Je-chan! And by the way, you're a great writer! Far better than me! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Forever Lost 55 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 You're welcome :3 and thanks >.< Not 'far better' than you though o.o Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Well I think you're "far better" than me. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Wow!! Nice job Misaki-chan!! You've finally started writing!! ...Too bad your first one was so... angsty. Hm... WRITE A HAPPY ONE NEXT TIME!! Well, this is kinda happy, but... You know. WRITE MORE!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Don't listen to Chels, I like angsty stories. why is it ShinShi I will ignore that for now. It's really good for a first story, but one thing I'm curious about is how old Shiho is right now. I'd pin my guesses on 25, but that sounds like a long time to take care of the BO. ... .. How did you choose the name? I usually just search up random things till I find something I like. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 Wow!! Nice job Misaki-chan!! You've finally started writing!! ...Too bad your first one was so... angsty. Hm... WRITE A HAPPY ONE NEXT TIME!! Well, this is kinda happy, but... You know. WRITE MORE!! I like my angst. =x= But thanks! Don't listen to Chels, I like angsty stories. why is it ShinShi I will ignore that for now. It's really good for a first story, but one thing I'm curious about is how old Shiho is right now. I'd pin my guesses on 25, but that sounds like a long time to take care of the BO. ... .. How did you choose the name? I usually just search up random things till I find something I like. Why ShinShi? Because I am a loyal fan to the pairing! *pounds chest* Of course, the only thing defining it from ShinShi and ShinRan is the name in the last sentence, so it's pretty easy just to change the name... As for why it took so long, perhaps the BO avoided them for a majority of those five years...? As for the title, Je-chan helped me there. She suggested the name and I liked it. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aeyra 260 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 I like my angst. =x= But thanks! Why ShinShi? Because I am a loyal fan to the pairing! *pounds chest* Of course, the only thing defining it from ShinShi and ShinRan is the name in the last sentence, so it's pretty easy just to change the name... As for why it took so long, perhaps the BO avoided them for a majority of those five years...? As for the title, Je-chan helped me there. She suggested the name and I liked it. I meant their daughter. Good point about the ShinShi and ShinRan thing, but they have pretty different personalities... *sigh* I just remembered a good ConAi plot bunny I thought of. I guess if I write that it fulfills my obligations. *pulls out iTouch* I shall stay up until eleven o'clock writing. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 14, 2011 I wanted a kid. ^__^ That's my only reasoning! XD Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Cammy3131 20 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 SATO-SAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DO YOU EVEN COMPREHEND HOW WONDERFULLY BEAUTIFUL THAT WAS! GOD! I WISH I COULD WRITE LIKE YOU! THAT WAS AWESOME! WAS IT A ONESHOT???? I'm figuring it was.... BUT BESIDES THAT THE EPICNESS WAS AWESOME AND I KNOW I'M A SHINxRAN, BUT I THINK YOU MADE ME WANT TO BE A SHINxSHI FOR A MOMENT...(only for a moment) .... BUT WHILE I WAS READING THIS I DID ACTUALLY THINK I WAS A SHINxSHI... VERY GOOD!!!! BRAVOOO~~~!!!! BRAVO!! XDXDXDXDXD Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Do I ever comprehend how "wonderfully beautiful" my fanfic is? I guess I do. I must say, this may be one of my best writing works yet. Yes, this is a oneshot unless I feel like otherwise. But Taru, your writing is very good also, probably better than me by a long shot. I'm glad you became a ShinShi, even if it was only for a second. I'm also glad that you enjoyed it so much! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Anti-APTX4869 181 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 (edited) The lines: She takes after him quite a bit... If only she was able to meet him... If only... If only you hadn’t run into Gin that night, if only I had stopped you, if only you didn’t get involved with Them, if only, IF ONLY! But if you hadn’t... I would have never met you... And I would have never fallen for you... My hands would still be unknowingly bloodstained. I might be dead and would not had been blessed with Hanako. I would have never met all the kind people in my life... I wouldn’t be happy. A small smile crept onto my face as I looked at the sky. It shone with a mixture of red, orange and yellow. kinda gave away that it was ShinShi, because if it was Ran, she wouldn't say 'But if you hadn’t... I would have never met you... And I would have never fallen for you...' after 'If only you hadn’t run into Gin that night' that won't make sense if it was anyone else except Shiho/Haibara. XD XD It's good!!! I loved this. It's so touching! Great job on making those words come alive! EDIT: Rep from me! Good work Edited June 15, 2011 by Anti-APTX4869 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Sure~, make it obvious, why don't you? Lol, JK, but thanks! XD I'm glad you like it so much! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Detective Rohit 38 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Nice Misaki Ne-chan! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Thank you Rohit-san! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tna Uchiha 23 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Awesooomee~! You did a very good work! I love the story <3 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Thank you Tna-san! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
BK201 31 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Nice one, misaki-chan... but it's angsty and it broke my heart...T_T and i can't believe this is your first fanfic... it's so wonderfully done! oh well... congrats for a job well done! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 Thank you! ^___^ What can i say? I just love angst! XD Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 NNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!! THE ANGST!! IT'S TOO MUCH!! *Chelsea dies of the overpowering angst* Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Misaki-chan 164 Report post Posted June 15, 2011 O____o CHELSEA!!!!! DX *gives Reviving Cookies* I'll try and make the next one happy, ok? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
J3nny 22 Report post Posted July 4, 2011 REALLY awesome!!!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
