Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 Conan layed on the couch at the Mouri Detective Agency, bored half to death. Hattori and Kazuha were on vacation in Karuizawa for the weekend with their parents, and Kogoro was out on a forced date with Eri, courtesy of Ran. "At least Ran is enjoying herself," he sighed, peering over his shoulder. She was flipping through a photo album she'd dug up from when her parents had been dating, beaming as she looked over Kogoro and Eri's past. Right as he decided to go out for the day, there was a knock on the door. "A client?" Ran inquired, glancing up from the book. Knowing it would be better to allow the person in than wait for Mouri-san, Conan went to the front door and pulled it open to see four teens standing there. The three boys looked calm and collected, but the girl, who had long straight hair a few shades lighter than Haibara's and sky-blue eyes, seemed extremely anxious. "Wow, you guys are really here?" said one of the male teens. Conan couldn't tell how tall he was since he was in a wheelchair, but he was thin, and his brown ponytail hung down behind the back of his chair. Upon a closer look he discovered that he had one brown eye, and one blue behind his round glasses. The other two stood tall, likely the leaders of the group. The slightly shorter boy was blonde, and had the same eyes as the girl. Once he had let them in Conan took a look at the last high schooler. He was the tallest by possibly a few centimeters, with raven hair and violet eyes that sat behind rectangular-framed spectacles, studying Conan as well. As they sat down, Ran went to the kitchen to get tea, leaving him to question the teens. "Why are you here?" he inquired. The girl, who introduced herself as Amari Kira, replied, "That was sort of what we were going to ask. You are an anime character, and by all laws of nature, we shouldn't be here. This can't be a dream, so use your deductive skills and tell us how to leave." "Eh? What are you talking about?" At this the leader of the group stated, "You are high school detective Kudo Shinichi. The black organization's Gin gave you poison that made you small, and you are living with Ran and her father to get the Apotoxin antidote." Conan froze. "Who are you?" The boy smirked and began, "I am Ryoka Boy's Academy Class A's Hande Mura, and this is Osawa Minoru." He pointed at the boy in his wheelchair, who smiled kindly. Then the blonde teen announced, "I am Amari Seiji, and you have already met my sister, Kira." Conan sighed. "I meant to ask where you came from and how you know about me," he whispered as Ran reappeared, carrying a tray with cups of green tea and plates of cake. Minoru tore a sheet of paper from the sketch pad on his lap, where he had written an explanation during the introductions. "We are from the real world," he read silently, thinking, That makes absolutely no sense. He read on regardless, "For some reason the link we took to look at a detective conan world site brought us here. And now we need your help to get back to reality." "Oi, oi," he mumbled, wondering why the hell these people all seemed to be having the same delusions. While the others were busy talking to Ran, Kira-san tiptoed over to where Conan sat. "Okay, it's going to seem really weird in a minute because they are going to talk about Shinichi-kun, but he's not you. Our Shinichi is actually Natake Rin, but there was a whole attempt to get her in the Witness Protection Program that failed." At his clueless expression the girl simply said, "Anyway don't get confused, and don't say anything to the others cause they don't know." "O-kaay?" The rest of the group directed their attention toward Conan, who they knew was capable of helping them, and Mura produced a photograph from his chest pocket. It was of a shortish high schooler with black hair and intense dark green eyes. "This is our classmate Natake Shinichi," he stated, sliding the picture over to Conan. Ran looked at the photo over his shoulder as the boy continued. "We need you to find him." 5 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 Ooh, real-life crossover. Nice. I'll give this a tentative 4/5. 2 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 @Moho You got a rep for that...? Nice job. This is interesting so far... Another real-life crossover huh? They're popular nowadays... I wonder why. Pretty good start, but a little confusing. Very interesting though!! ...I thought you were a girl. Keep it up!! Update soon!! I'll also give this a 4/5. 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 @Moho You got a rep for that...? WTF? Chelsea, you deserve a rep too for rating! *gives a rep* Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 What do you mean you thought I was a girl? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 What do you mean you thought I was a girl? Exactly what she said, my good sir. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 I still don't get it. I never said I wasn't, and I am definitely not a guy. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 I still don't get it. I never said I wasn't, and I am definitely not a guy. *points* She isn't online right now. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 Ah. Well, I'll talk to her tomorrow. Night, Mohvic-senpai. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 "This is our classmate Natake Shinichi," he stated, sliding the picture over to Conan. Ran looked at the photo over his shoulder as the boy continued. "We need you to find him." You said we need you to find him... @Moho Thanks for the rep!! XD Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lupin of the Heisei Era 248 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 actually, i really like it. i'll give you 5/5 because you are creative. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted July 30, 2011 You said we need you to find him... This isn't a real life crossover... This is a crossover of one of my books that's not published yet. And the main character of that book is a girl, but due to circumstances regarding a murder she witnessed, she is living as a male student under the false name Shinichi until the culprit from that case is apprehended. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 6, 2011 Hmm, it's off to a pretty good start. It seems slightly confusing, but not bad. Like the others before, 4/5. And could you space out your paragraphs? It would be easier and more pleasant to read that way. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Black Demon 466 Report post Posted August 6, 2011 Still waiting for the next chapter Keep it up. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 6, 2011 Oh, and note. I'm not sure if this is a typo or anything, but you seem to tend to spell 'weird' as 'wierd'. 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rukia Kurosaki 357 Report post Posted August 8, 2011 Geh, that almost always happens when I type the word weird. My fingers don't move in the right order. Whenever I type episode it ends up saying episdoe, too. (Curse you fingers!) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted August 8, 2011 to put it bluntly... i hate crossovers... Izvinite/gomen/sorry >///< it was confusing because the paragraphs werent separated, and the descriptions were given so fast that i accidentally jumbled them xD (i probably should stop speed reading when paragraphs are mashed~) the plot seems interesting, but since its a crossover... i've no real interest... if it were just based on opinion... i'd give a 1/5, but i can't stand crossovers (as i've now stated multiple times)... but, if i don't base it on opinion i give it a 4/5, its nicely done and i think it has some real potential it just isn't my thing xD sorry, can't help but be biased :3 anyways, good luck in your writing and i wish you the best! (also, you guys give out rep points easily xD i don't seem to get any anymore... then again i rarely ever give becuz nobody mention SHINSHI/AICON as much anymore TT-TT) 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kuroba Kudou 5 Report post Posted August 10, 2011 It's awesome. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
