RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted July 24, 2010 As promised, here is Chapter 1 of our first story. We appreciate comments and constructive feedback! Disclaimer: The Giggle Twins own nothing besides the plot and no profit is being made from this besides amusement. They will return all characters to their proper owners when they are done. Kaito: Now if only they’d sent a heist notice it would be in true Kaitou fashion… Get KID!! KID grinned as the door closed behind him, leaving the cool night breeze as his only companion. “Excellent,” he purred, eyes scanning the empty garden rooftop. So far the heist was going extremely well despite, or perhaps because of, the presence of the three tantei. His grin grew wider as he held tonight’s prize up to the moon. The Blue Ocean sapphire, on loan to the Sapphire Sea Hotel for its Grand Opening, stayed stubbornly blue and he lowered it again with a sigh. Time to prepare for his grand finale and exit. Many floors below KID pandemonium reigned. Task Force officers picked themselves up off the floor and pulled themselves free of the booby traps KID had left behind. “Track him down!” Nakamori-keibu bellowed. “Don’t let him get away!” “It is likely that he has headed for the roof,” put in Hakuba as he finished freeing himself from the brightly colored duct tape which had temporarily taken him out of the game. A snort answered him. “Don’t ya think that’s just a little too obvious? Everyone knows KID can fly.” “But that’s why he’ll do it, Heiji-niisan,” Conan piped up, little boy act in full force. “He wants us there for whatever he has planned.” Really, KID’s entire act tonight had been too simple, beginning with the heist notice which had been delivered to the station two days prior. Poseidon’s careful watch is lost when Maia dances round the gleaming stone. Selene in splendor full arises and Hermes bows as he accepts the dance. Poseidon was the Greek god of the oceans and the Blue Ocean sapphire had been the only stone on display that matched up with that. Maia was a Greek nymph often associated with the month of May and Selene was a Greek moon goddess. That meant that the heist was to take place on the full moon in May. Hermes was the Greek god of thieves. The whole thing had just been too easy. KID was up to something. Nakamori-keibu jerked his radio up to his mouth. “All units to the roof! Move it men!” He turned back to the three detectives. “You three stay out of the way!” KID glanced at his watch and sighed. “So slow tonight, tantei. You’re off your game.” No doubt they will be here soon, though. I’ll give them another minute before I take off. The plan was a simple one but KID wanted his audience there to witness it. Rather than escape via the somewhat predictable means of using his glider, he had arranged to “disappear” from the roof. Jii was waiting on the roof of one of the neighboring buildings (the only one nearby which was lower than the hotel) to fire a zip line across to the thief. KID would then vanish in a flash of light and smoke, hide his white suit under a dark cloak, and slide down the wire. Once safely on the other roof he would cut the wire and make his escape. As if on cue he saw the stairwell door slam open and heard Nakamori-keibu’s distinctive bellow. “There he is! Get him!” KID offered a jaunty wave to Task Force and tantei alike. “Took you long enough,” he said with a saucy grin. “I shall now bid you all a fond farewell as I vanish before your very eyes.” He turned to run only to find himself inexplicably face-down in the dirt and gravel of the rooftop. Owwww, was his first thought, followed quickly by, what the heck just happened? Did I trip? I never trip! He tried to get to his feet only to fall back to the dirt, arms and legs useless. This can’t be happening! He thought wildly. Did Tantei-kun manage to hit me with one of his darts? A glance down revealed that his clothes appeared to be much larger than they were previously, hands no longer visible below his cuffs. I’m shrinking??? Well, at least that explains how I tripped. Is this what happened to Tantei-kun? Never mind that now, Kaito, the Task Force is only a little ways behind you! Mind on the present and figure out how to get out of this! Another attempt to get up failed and everything suddenly went black around him. Before KID could gather his thoughts enough to figure out what the heck had happened now he heard the thunder of approaching feet and felt the vibrations of dozens of people surrounding him. “Damn it! That son of a bitch got away again! How the hell did he do that?” Ah, yes, there was the Nakamori-keibu he knew and loved. The language had seemed awfully tame before all this. Now, maybe if he just lay here very still, they wouldn’t find him like this….however “this” was. “Why would the guy leave his costume behind?” With the Osaka accent that had to be Tantei-han speaking. KID really wished he could see but he didn’t dare try to move again with so many people surrounding him. Hakuba’s cultured voice answered the Osaka-jin’s question. “That is remarkably odd. KID never leaves any part of his normal uniform behind on a heist. Too much risk of leaving trace evidence behind.” “It’s probably a fake, part of his trick to make us think he really did disappear,” Conan’s small voice interjected. “We should fan out, check the area for any clues.” “Just stay out of the f…“ Nakamori broke off abruptly as he forcefully reminded himself that no matter how big of a pain the Edogawa boy was, he was still a child. “Just stay out of the way!” He amended himself. “This is my crime scene and I don’t need kids poking their noses where they don’t belong!” The Task Force quickly split up to search the roof for any signs of KID. This is not happening. Did Akako do this to me? Why would she do this? KID thought frantically, everything around him still black. He strained his ears for any sounds. “I can’t let them find me, but why is it getting so hard to breathe? He must have made some faint noise because the next thing he heard was Conan’s voice saying, “Listen! Did you hear something?” Dead silence followed this for several heartbeats as KID struggled to breathe. “I do hear something. It’s very faint but it sounds like it’s coming from under KID’s hat.” No! Nononono! I can’t be found. Even if it is hard to breathe right now it’s better than being caught! Suddenly he found himself blinking rapidly in the nearly blinding glare of half a dozen flashlights as his top hat was lifted away by one Edogawa Conan. “A gold fish?” Hattori exclaimed incredulously. “Seriously? What the hell was the guy thinkin’ of, leaving a gold fish out of water like this jus’ for a stupid joke?” KID breathed a sigh of relief at his apparent escape before the rest of Hattori’s words registered. A gold f..f..fish??? I don’t have any of those…those…things! Utterly terrified now and beyond even the hope of using Poker Face, KID attempted to scramble backwards only to find himself flopping uselessly against the jumble of his white suit. “That poor fish is going to die if we do not get it into water soon,” Hakuba pointed out. “Conan-kun, I believe I see a koi pond to your left. May I suggest you transport the fish over to it as quickly as you are able?” Conan nodded and reached down for the struggling fish. Lightheaded from lack of air and terrified from the thought of being so near one of those evil scaly things, as well as the possibility of being caught, KID didn’t immediately notice what Conan was reaching for until two hands wrapped around him and lifted him into the air. Oh kami-sama! I’m the f…f…fish! He stared in horror at the other fish swimming in the koi pond Conan was about to put him into. His panicked escape attempt failed miserably, resulting in him flipping out of Conan’s hands and directly into the pond with an incongruously large splash. “AAAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!” Kaito sat bolt upright in bed, shivering from a cold sweat that plastered his clothes to his body. He nearly leaped from the bed in his rush to reach the bathroom where he stared at himself in the mirror, trying to convince his terrified mind that it had only been a dream. At last he drew in a shaky breath and splashed cool water on his face. “Just a dream. It was just a dream.” Too realistic though, right down to the timing of the heist note. His dream self had conducted the heist during May’s full moon, less than a week away. Returning to his room Kaito pulled a fresh set of pajamas from his dresser and got changed. As he did so he noted the glowing numbers of his alarm clock. 3 AM. At least ‘Kaasan has the night shift tonight. She won’t be back for another few hours. The last thing he wanted to do was to wake her up because of a bad dream. “What am I, seven? Sheesh.” He quickly and efficiently stripped the sweat soaked sheets from his bed, remaking it with a clean set. Gotta get some sleep. Exams later today. His last thought as he rolled back into bed was stupid fish. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Southpaw 61 Report post Posted July 24, 2010 that was great! I wanna see more one little thing... I think early on you had a misplaced quotation mark... in the paragraph "KID glanced at his watch and sighed" Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Scar Akai 65 Report post Posted July 24, 2010 *mazing. I love your way of writing. Your plot is nice and there are almost no grammatical errors at all. I am also shocked as fanfic writers seldom put adjective adverbs and etc. To describe the scene or action better, but you did. You should be proud of yourself for having the talent of writing. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted July 25, 2010 that was great! I wanna see more one little thing... I think early on you had a misplaced quotation mark... in the paragraph "KID glanced at his watch and sighed" Thank you! We're glad you liked it and we are also grateful for your correction as it brought to our attention a formatting error in the chapter. For some reason all of the italics indicating thought were removed. It has since been fixed. More on the way soon! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted July 25, 2010 *mazing. I love your way of writing. Your plot is nice and there are almost no grammatical errors at all. I am also shocked as fanfic writers seldom put adjective adverbs and etc. To describe the scene or action better, but you did. You should be proud of yourself for having the talent of writing. Thank you! Your comments are appreciated, we love feedback. Please feel free to point out any errors you find as we want to improve our writing. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted July 28, 2010 it was amazing! keep writing stories like this! i can't wait to read more >w< Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
J3nny 22 Report post Posted October 16, 2010 one question, i kinda saw this tittle on youtube. Did u make the video? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted October 18, 2010 one question, i kinda saw this tittle on youtube. Did u make the video? I wish we did make that AMV. However we felt that the song itself was the best name for this story. Thank you for reading Chapter 4 will be up very soon. The GiggleTwins Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Stopwatch 36 Report post Posted January 9, 2011 Is this on ff.net? I think I've seen it before. Anyway, brilliant idea, it seems like just the sort of thing Kaito would dream of. I'd say it was one of the better fics I've read here so far and no spelling errors as far as I could see. Love it Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted January 10, 2011 Applause! This is one of the best I've read so far! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bubbles 0 Report post Posted January 15, 2011 more please! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted January 29, 2011 yes we are over on ff.net and thank you for your comments. :-D Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted July 23, 2011 That was awesome! I'm surprised I haven't seen any of your stories before...love the goldfish. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Vi Graythorn 50 Report post Posted July 24, 2011 how many chapters r there gonna be Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted July 24, 2011 how many chapters r there gonna be At the moment we think about 20 or more Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Vi Graythorn 50 Report post Posted July 24, 2011 At the moment we think about 20 or more wow i just formatted it on word there already 30 pages Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoseMarie 0 Report post Posted July 24, 2011 wow i just formatted it on word there already 30 pages do you like it so far? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lupin of the Heisei Era 248 Report post Posted July 24, 2011 COOL! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Cindy-Chen 82 Report post Posted October 29, 2011 That's really good! Keep on writing! Heehee. Kaito has nightmares about fish. Heeheeheehee. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
anniemay 2 Report post Posted December 17, 2011 It's great thank you! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
