Ran Moorie 17 Report post Posted December 8, 2010 Note: this is not the end there is more to come. “Ran! Watch out!” Shinichi shouted. He threw his body at Ran. All of a sudden a strike of pain throbbed through his body. “Oh no! Please don’t let me change back it isn’t even the fifth day yet.” Shinichi hoped. As he knocked Ran out of danger, he turned back to Conan right in front of Ran’s eyes. The bullet pierced him at his vital organs. Conan thudded onto the cold concrete floor seriously injured. Ran rushed over to him and shouted at him. “Shinichi how did you…..Turn into Conan. What is going on with you!? What secret are you keeping from me! Tell me!” As ran yelled those words tears welled up in her eyes. “Sorry, Ran.*huff huff* I shouldn’t had kept my secret from you.*huff* I am Shinichi. I just want to keep you safe from the Black Organization. *huff huff cough* Please, don’t cry Ran. I am so sorry.*cough wheeze* Shinichi said. Ran wiped the tears from her face and asked “Why did you do that for me? Why did you always risk your life for me?” Shinichi looked at her, eyes full of regret and said in his last words “Because I love you Ran, more than anyone else in the world.” With those last words, Conan collapsed at Ran’s knees. Ran Stood up shakily, took the gun that Shinichi used and pointed it at Gin. “Sorry, this is for Shinichi I have no choice.” Ran whispered. She fired it and Gin was dead. She then collapsed and weeps over Conan’s dead body. The police forces, FBI, CIA, and Hattori came over with their heads bowed low. Kazuwa came in the commotion and was about to ask ran what happened since she asked the people in the city where did Ran go. Kazuwa stood their as she saw Ran weeping with ever flowing tears on Conan’s body. “My tears will never reach him now, no matter how hard I cry,” Ran thought. Everyone stood in complete silent as Ran still kneeled and cried at Conan’s body. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
J3nny 22 Report post Posted December 9, 2010 that's so sad, but you did let Ran live but you didn't let Shinichi live...Quite sad but happy Very good Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted December 9, 2010 hmm, it is a good story line.. but i think it needs a bit more to it... like, the whole thing can't just be over at that... Gin isn't so stupid as to get shot by a girl with no experience from any range farther than like 7ft... maybe if you had him rush at her angrily and she raise the gun in defense, pulling the trigger unintentionally, she can hit him in a vital spot, though he won't die for a few minutes, and right as he goes to kill her, that's when the help arrives... also, it would take a little while for him to change back into conan, it can't be that quick... make it a little more descriptive (sometimes that makes it seem like more time has gone by) anyways, can't wait for the next chapter!!! (P.S. i'm quite sad i didn't get to comment first :cry: ) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
HennyAng 4 Report post Posted December 9, 2010 be waiting for the next chapter Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
