Rye 122 Report post Posted December 28, 2010 Hope you like it. "Bye, Agasa-hakase." Shiho went outside finding Shinichi waiting for her. "Aren't you supposed to wait for Ran, Kudou-kun?" she asked. "Nah, it's okay. Um, I have something to tell you. Can you have dinner with me tonight?" he asked."I know a nice restaurant." Shiho stood speechless. "Okay," she said while blushing."Well, we better hurry up." After school, they met at the place. "Do you like the food?" Shinichi said. "Yeah. It's nice." She said. Shinichi touched her hand. They were about to kiss when Ran and Sonoko came in. "Sonoko, this place is-" Ran almosed fainted in shock. "Ran, I can explain-" "Explain what?" "I waited for you this morning and you show up with her at school. Now I see you two--" Tears fell down her cheek. She grabbed Sonoko's arm and went out. Shinichi and Shiho were in shock too. Of all people, Ran is the person who sees them. After Shinichi paid the bill, both of them went home, having mixed feelings. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ran Moorie 17 Report post Posted December 28, 2010 pretty good. You could add more details you know to make the story a little bit more understandable since in some parts it is a little confusing but generally the story is just plain great! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Rye 122 Report post Posted December 29, 2010 Sorry if it's a bit confusing. I was doing it in a hurry. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted December 29, 2010 umm i think that you should specify whether or not ir's mornin or night, if they syndicate is gone... if they have changed back for good... those details that we all are waiting for in the series ^-^ anyways, i'm dyin to read more! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Scar Akai 65 Report post Posted December 30, 2010 Nice short story...You could have made it longer. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
