tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted January 30, 2011 Ran coughed again. She didn’t see her kidnapper; in fact, she never woke up while she was being kidnapped. When she did awake, she found herself in a large empty building. The only door out was full of dents, ones made by Ran’s attempt to escape. Just then, she heard a harsh scratching sound outside the door. When the noise stopped, the door opened slowly. Ran charged and was about to kick who ever was entering, but… “Ran-neechan?” a voice said. Ran froze in her path. “Conan-kun? What was he doing here?” she thought in a panic. “Conan-kun?” Ran cried in response. The mysterious figure merely turned around and closed the door, leaving Ran feeling worried and tired. She kicked the door again, but whatever was in front of the door was back in place. “Shinichi…save me!” she thought in desperation. It was the announced day of Kaitou Kid’s heist of the Sun’s Radiance. The night was calm and cool, but Conan was in no mood to relax. He was on full guard, looking out for the Black Organization and Ran’s kidnapper… He scanned the dome. It was about 30 meters high,and was made entirely of glass. Within the glass was water, and within the water were many kinds of exotic fish. The fish were swimming around, one occasionally giving Conan an odd stare, as if seeing him going to his death. Around the dome was a ring of police cars. Around each car were policemen. For each policeman, there were 2 eyes darting around and scanning everything in sight like little lasers. There were also four policemen that were guarding the opposite ends of the dome, where the entrances were. Outside the police car ring were various cars. Within those cars were Kaitou Kid fans that the police did not let through.Conan scanned the cars parked outside. He saw a green Jaguar, a Viper, a silver Honda, and many other cars parked outside. However, Conan failed to notice the black Porsche 356A parked outside the ring of police. The dome’s interior was rather barren. The only thing of notice inside was the glass case that was holding the Sun’s Radiance within itself. Around the case were four policemen, and there were several policemen and Inspector Nakamori inside. Jirokichi was inside as well, laughing his head off. Conan checked his clock – which told him it was 6:30 P.M – again. “Only 30 minutes to go,” he thought, but his real thoughts was what would happen at 9… Conan thought about Kid’s letter again: At 7 o’clock Saturday, the guards of the water kingdom will fall asleep. While the guards have their nap, I will appear and take the Sun’s Radiance. The letter made little sense to him. The water kingdom could mean the dome, but how could Kid make all the policemen fall asleep? Like on cue, the time hit 7 o’clock, and part of the dome exploded. From the holes in the dome, the water and its inhabitants fell out. At the same time, a mysterious gas starting leaking from the floor ofthe dome. Nakamori immediately called, “Don’t breathe the gas! It’s sleeping gas! Get out of the dome!” With that order, everyone in the dome quickly ran out, holding his or her breath. They could only watch as the gas concealed the case from view. Then, they heard the case shatter. “Damn it!” Nakamori cried out in anger. He knew Kid took the jewel, but how could he take it, surrounded by sleeping gas? Meanwhile, the Kid was having a great time. The heist of the Sun’s Radiance went smooth. He turned his white wings – his glider, and felt as he could fly. Of course, he also fell to the ground like a shot bird when the sniper hit. Conan heard the sniper, and ran off in that direction before he could fully register what was happening. “The Black Organization…but why him?” He traced the Kid to be about 500 yards away, in the park. He quickly ran off. Nakamori frowned when he heard the sniper. He quickly shouted to his men, “Where did that shot come from?! Track it!”. The policemen quickly ran off in different directions like idiots. The park offered excellent shielding against the moonlight, making the park feel dark. One could not see their hand in the darkness. Conan found the Kid, bleeding heavily from a shot in the chest in a bush. He quickly cleared the bush and pulled the Kid out. The Kid was unconscious, from the wound or the ground impact, he didn’t know. Conan listened again. He heard it, the crunching sound of footsteps. He quickly ran off and hid behind a tree. And from the wall of trees came a single entity. Gin. And his glare was one of a predator that caught his prey. “It’s been a long time, Kudo Shinichi. You have caused us much trouble.” He quickly pulled out his pistol. “Honestly, I didn’t expect you to be challenging us in the open.” “Kudo Shinichi?” Conan thought. “I see, they thinkhe’s me…” Gin walked up to the Kid with careful steps, as if the park was mined. His pistol went directly to Kid’s forehead. “And with this, the great detective falls. Again.” And the pistol fired. Conan looked in horror as more blood spurted from the shot. Gin quickly turned around and left, as his job was done. Conan quietly went up to Kid. All signs of life were gone, but a faint smile was dangling on his lips, as if he had an untold secret. Conan knew Kid wasn’t smiling before. He then walked away. He heard the police marching over, but knew it was hopeless. They couldn’t help. “Another person dead! Damn!” The story of Kid’s death was all over the news the following day. Of course, the police found out Kid’s identity. Kuroba Kaito – high school troublemaker. Megure, however, had other cases. As per his orders, no one in the police spoke of the culprit behind the bombing of Agasa’s house. There were traces of fingerprints over in various places that managed to survive; in particular a bomb that failed to go off. The fire department quickly sent the bombs and evidence to forensics. Megure remembered the day the forensics quietly asked Megure to come. He also remembers the moment the forensics told him the culprit, and the utter disbelief. Takagi walked up to him. “Are you OK, Inspector?” Megure groaned. “Takagi. Remember, tell no one that he is the culprit. Tell no one!” “OK, sir…but you’ve been saying that for a while now.” With that, Takagi left. Megure turned around. The scar around his hat was burning, like a forewarning of what would come. “Kudo-kun…what…exactly happened?” Yeah, I rushed it. It isn't very good. But I finished it. Comment please below! 1 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
panda456 7 Report post Posted January 31, 2011 Its good so far. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted January 31, 2011 it's ok so far... you could do a bit more to make it interesting... i was slightly confused as you jumped from Ran to conan... maybe spice up the letter from kaito a bit as well... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted January 31, 2011 Yay! I like it! I was just wondering what was that bit with Conan and Ran (When she was kidnapped)... Please continue! I love this story! Arigato~ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted January 31, 2011 Dear Readers, Thank you for reading the incomplete chapter. I apologize that I cannot get the whole chapter to you as I am fighting off the flu and my neural functions are compromised. I must thank you for remaining patient during this time, and I will finish this chapter posthaste. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 1/31/2011 at 11:12 PM, xXLeration said: Dear Readers, Thank you for reading the incomplete chapter. I apologize that I cannot get the whole chapter to you as I am fighting off the flu and my neural functions are compromised. I must thank you for remaining patient during this time, and I will finish this chapter posthaste. get well soon! (Believe me, unlike wat i've already done... make ppl wait months for my final chapter.... i still havn't finished... i just truly don't know how i want to end it!!!) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 Preview session is over. I am sorry. By the time you have read this post, the story will already be down... Please be patient while I finish this chapter... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 2/1/2011 at 2:07 AM, xXLeration said: Preview session is over. I am sorry. By the time you have read this post, the story will already be down... Please be patient while I finish this chapter... ok then, i will patiently wait ^^ doo doo doo doo dooooooo... ok... i waited... GIMME DA CHAPTA! XD lawl jk, take your time ^^ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 2/1/2011 at 4:03 AM, Kiel said: ok then, i will patiently wait ^^ doo doo doo doo dooooooo... ok... i waited... GIMME DA CHAPTA! XD lawl jk, take your time ^^ Lol... I will finish this chapter... even if my flu kills me! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 2/1/2011 at 4:18 AM, xXLeration said: Lol... I will finish this chapter... even if my flu kills me! don't die! then you won't be able to finish the rest of the story... and I'll miss you!!!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 2/1/2011 at 1:55 PM, Kiel said: don't die! then you won't be able to finish the rest of the story... and I'll miss you!!!! Lol I'm kidding...I'm much better now... You'll miss me? I feel so warm inside Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 1, 2011 On 2/1/2011 at 3:12 PM, xXLeration said: Lol I'm kidding...I'm much better now... You'll miss me? I feel so warm inside c(^0^c) *hugs* of course I'll miss you! <3 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 9, 2011 Whew...it's been longer then 7 days, but I finished! Yay! Please comment on the finished chapter! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kiel95 86 Report post Posted February 9, 2011 i read it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! <3 <3 <3 that was amazing! given i had forgotten it was updated.... so i didn't reread the whole thing, but that was amazing! i just wish you hadn't killed KID... i don't think he should've died.... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted February 9, 2011 WHOA! Kid is DEAD? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! I think Kid should've said something to Gin before he died. And you might of wanted to show the reactions of Nakamori and the others, since Nakamori was close to Kaito. BUT KEEP IT UP! I LOVE IT! UPDATE SOON! ARIGATO! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
panda456 7 Report post Posted February 14, 2011 It was good but how could you kill kid... he's one of my most favorite characters after gin and vodka of course Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 15, 2011 On 2/9/2011 at 12:42 PM, Kiel said: i read it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! <3 <3 <3 that was amazing! given i had forgotten it was updated.... so i didn't reread the whole thing, but that was amazing! i just wish you hadn't killed KID... i don't think he should've died.... On 2/9/2011 at 11:45 PM, Chelseaj500 said: WHOA! Kid is DEAD? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! I think Kid should've said something to Gin before he died. And you might of wanted to show the reactions of Nakamori and the others, since Nakamori was close to Kaito. BUT KEEP IT UP! I LOVE IT! UPDATE SOON! ARIGATO! On 2/14/2011 at 9:56 PM, panda456 said: It was good but how could you kill kid... he's one of my most favorite characters after gin and vodka of course I killed Kid because I am evil... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Alleangean1412 2 Report post Posted February 18, 2011 A little tooooooooo Evil I mean you killed off my favorite character just like that!!!! and I think Gin would me smarter to know that KID can't be Shinichi. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tengaku squared 291 Report post Posted February 23, 2011 On 2/18/2011 at 2:18 PM, Grim-Ripper The Deadly said: A little tooooooooo Evil I mean you killed off my favorite character just like that!!!! and I think Gin would me smarter to know that KID can't be Shinichi. Would he know better? It's all part of the plot. NOTE: Because I am revising this series under a new name (The Hunt), this series will be suspended for a few weeks. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites